Mercenary Story Rewrite (Contiuned)

k9870 · #1 08-23-2010, 08:56 AM

Whats his militias span of control, i he more localized, like in the capital, or does the warlord control like the whole country?

Swordfish941 · #2 08-23-2010, 11:11 AM

He controls Kismaayo and most of the area surrounding it.

Swordfish941 · #3 08-23-2010, 11:23 AM

I've decided to replace George's Huey with an aircraft that's based off a V-22 Osprey tiltrotor. It's called an X-94 Phantom triltrotor. It holds 24 people, and has a GShG -7.62 machine gun mounted in the nose.

Swordfish941 · #4 08-23-2010, 07:28 PM

Can someone suggest a working title? I tried The Mercenary, but that seems too bland.

BurtReynoldsMoustache · #5 08-23-2010, 08:24 PM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941

Can someone suggest a working title? I tried The Mercenary, but that seems too bland.

Necessary Evil

Swordfish941 · #6 08-23-2010, 08:42 PM

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Originally Posted by BurtReynoldsMoustache

Necessary Evil

It sounds like a rip off of Resident Evil. And I don't want your opinion, you conspiracy theorist.

S&Wshooter · #7 08-23-2010, 08:48 PM

Die Huurlinge

The Mercenaries, but translated to Afrikaans

Just kidding. That sounds horrible

BurtReynoldsMoustache · #8 08-24-2010, 03:40 PM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941

And I don't want your opinion, you conspiracy theorist.

I'm not a conspiracy theorist, and what's wrong with my opinion?

k9870 · #9 08-23-2010, 10:27 PM

that sounds pretty cool

Mandolin1 · #10 08-24-2010, 12:45 AM

From the original thread:

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Ares' main sidearm is a Heckler & Koch Mk. 23 Mod. 0. His secondary sidearm is a IMI Desert Eagle Mk. XIX in .44 Magnum and fitted with a stainless frame. His main rifle is a Vektor CR-21 fitted with a SUAT scope in place of the 1x optical sight. He also uses a Barrett M107 sniper rifle (which he nicknames "The Beast of Burden") to kill Somali pirates. He also uses a Remington 870 fitted with a Speedfeed stock, spare shell holder mounted on receiver, Surefire 618 weaponlight, and ghost ring sights..

Didn't we decide that he should have a more useful handgun(s)

Yet here you say:

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Ares carries a Heckler & Koch Mk. 23 Mod 0 as his sidearm and a Desert Eagle Mk XIX fitted with a stainless frame in .44 Magnum as his back up gun. His main weapon is a Vektor CR-21 fitted with a British SUAT scope

Please, no Mk23s or Desert Eagles.

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Mac Diesel's main weapons are a M60 Machine Gun and a M79 Grenade Launcher

An M60 AND an M79 is too much bulk (if not weight) for one guy. Remember, a 40mm grenade round is 1/2 pound. You carry a meaningful amount, that's a lot of weight. Maybe an M203 on Pieter's M16A1? Why does Cooper have 2 Glocks on shoulder holsters as well as a G36? Two pistols is bad, two identical pistols in shoulder holsters is worse. Just screams "mall ninja" to me. And why does he have the G36K when everyone else has much older guns? Shouldn't George have a rifle?
It seams to me that you have got Pieter, whose gun choices leave me wondering where he's from (thought definitely some 4th-world backwater)
Sean (his weapons and name SCREAM "I'm IRA" to me.)
Mack Diesel (giant with too much stuff, probably fought in Vietnam. Nice pun there in his name BTW).
Then you have Cooper, whose weapons are modern European HK nut. George just needs a real gun.

Ok, enough about them What i think about Swordfishe's guys:
Greg: good weapons.
Ares: see above
Roco: Nice choices, just give him an Uzi (or MP5, to share mags) for when you don't need a full-size FAL.
Katie: Good choices, but give her an HK33, M4/M733/CAR-15, or something like that for when the bad guys are over 100+ yards away.
Johnny: See Katie.
I still think they need a grenade launcher (Greg or Roco) or an MGL type thing (Katie? Chick with a revolver grenade launcher, nice) A machine gun would be nice too.