Literary plot outline

Swordfish941 · #1 12-29-2009, 11:36 PM

Here's a scene where Greg's group and Nolan's group are having dinner:

The men sat themselves down at a table. Greg and his group sat on the left while Nolan's group sat on the right. Thier meal was steak, burnt, crisp, and hard as a rock with lumpy mashed potatoes covered in a bitter tasting gravy, green beans, and water to drink. Tapioca pudding was served as dessert. Overall, the meal was a meager and unpleasent one.

"You know, I wished they served better stuff besides this shit." Rocco complained, finally giving up on cutting his steak. "I bet those higher ranking officiers are having a gourment meal. They're probally drinking wine, smokin' Cubans, and feasting on fresh, juicy Sirloin."

"You're talking out of your ass, Rocco. They're having the same meal." Ares replied, helping himself to another serving of Tapioca pudding (probaly being the only one there who enjoyed it).

"Yeah, I mean, the green beans aren't that bad." said Tic-Tac.

"Ares could cook something better this. He's our cook." Greg said reaching into his pocket for a cigarrette. "His Da owns a bar and grille in East London. He taught him the basics of cookin'."

Swordfish941 · #2 12-31-2009, 11:32 PM

Does anyone have any ideas for some action sequences in the Mozambique arc. I have a basic idea of what I want to be like (after watching the shootout between the Nigerians and the PMC/mercenaries in "District 9"). I need some scenes to happen after Greg is rescued.

S&Wshooter · #3 01-01-2010, 03:09 AM

something involving a helicopter

Alcatrazz · #4 01-01-2010, 06:12 AM

To elaborate, a chase with the protagonists in an automobile while taking fire from foes in a helicopter. Give the foes small arms, and give the the protagonists one working explosive.

S&Wshooter · #5 01-01-2010, 07:10 AM

And then have them pull a Die Hard and destroy the helicopter by knocking it out of the sky with their car (which has the explosive strapped to it)

Swordfish941 · #6 01-01-2010, 07:22 AM

I'm sorry S&Wshooter, but I'm trying to keep the action as realistic as possible. I need something that involves the apartment building the mercenaries are hiding in and the rebels who are trying to get them out. These are good ideas, though.

S&Wshooter · #7 01-01-2010, 07:26 AM

How about the helicopter crashing into the building, driving the baddies outside into what can only be described as wholesale slaughter?