As of now I've only introduced Greg, Ares, and Katie. Rocco is mentioned and I'm now writing Johnny's introduction. Anyway, here's the first part of my rewritten draft:
The lonely moon began to vanish in the western sky, but its brother, the sun, was beginning its daily cycle. It sparkled on the sea, making it shine like gold. A lone boat floated on it, nearing the Cape of Good Hope. It was an eighty foot PT boat left over from the second World War. Nostromo was its name. Its passengers were mercenaries, returning to Cape Town to relax after finishing a job of taking out a Rwandan warlord. A man walked up on its deck. He was in his late 20's, thin but with strong arms. His hair was colored dark brown and kept in a mullet while his eyes were hazel. He was wearing a pair of denim jeans with a leather belt, and a gray t-shirt. A leather holster was on the right side of his hip, and a Kimber .45 1911 pistol was in it. A cigarette hung from the corner of his mouth. The man's name was Gregory Mallory Archer, or Greg for short.
Greg stared at the horizon, blowing smoke out of his mouth. Watching the sunrise was absolutely beautiful, not like a beautiful women, but like the beauty in nature. It was five o'clock in the morning, and everyone on board was fast asleep in their cabins. Rocco would be in bed, cradling a bottle of Jose Cuervo Gold tequila as if it were his own child. He chuckled at this. Rocco had always promised that he would go cold turkey, yet you could find him trying to get the last few drops out of a liqueur bottle. He was almost as pathetic as a crack whore.
"Well, good morning sunshine." said a beautiful young woman wearing a blue nightgown and a pair of slippers. Her name was Katherine Berkley, but everyone called her Katie. Her hair was light brown and curly, but looked golden against the sun. Her eyes were green as emeralds and her skin had a tannish tone to it. It felt smooth and warm. Her breasts were the size of grapefriuts and any peverted man would lust after her, but not Greg. He had much more respect for her,
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