Mercenary Story Rewrite (Contiuned)

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Originally Posted by Markost

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I was going to suggest Paraguay or Perú.

Are those two countries in some sort of war?

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I think Greg should know some form of martial arts. I'm thinking of bartitsu. Anyone have any suggestions?

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Here's another part of my draft:

"Mornin', babe." Greg said quietly,lightly kissing her on the lips. "What are you doing up so early? You need your sleep."

"For what?"

"Your looks, what else? I know you rarely wear makeup."

"I get my looks from my mother." she said leaning against him and stroking his chin. Greg looked down at her legs. She was wearing a pair of boy shorts. Tucked inside them was a .32 caliber pistol. He snatched it from her in a blink of an eye.

"Greg!"

"What this for? Ear piercing?"

Katie grabbed the pistol back from him. "It's my gun for port calls. This is a .32 Walther PPK."

"Where do you keep it?"

"Usually in my waistband. I'm planning on buying a holster from Sharlto."

"Who's Sharlto?"

"An old friend from high school. He's now an arms dealer."

"Really."

"He smokes two bags of grass a day. He's pretty much what you get when you cross a loose cannon and an eccentric blabbermouth."

"What a character." Greg said tossing his cigarette butt into the ocean. He stepped into the doorway and turned back at Katie. "Do me a favor: next time you go see him, bring me along. You want some coffee?"

"Sure."

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This is my concept of what Greg is supposed to look like:

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This is my second concept of Greg:

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And this is my concept of Katie:

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What do you guys think of draft and concepts?