Literary plot outline

[k9870]

Id say other AK variants. Share ammo. Have one with a gp-25. Have one squad marksman with a bolt action, maybe a savage with harris bipod and night scope. Sidearms should be a little more personalizedthough. A swuad gunner too. Im not sure what type of SAWs are local to south africa though. Maybe give one a Stryker.

[Spartan198]

Stick an R5, the South African version of the Galil SAR, or two in there, too. Or R6 if you want something that can be "tacticooled" up.

As far as SAWs go, doesn't South Africa use a locally-produced derivative of the Negev light machine gun?

[Swordfish941]

Originally Posted by k9870

Id say other AK variants. Share ammo. Have one with a gp-25. Have one squad marksman with a bolt action, maybe a savage with harris bipod and night scope. Sidearms should be a little more personalizedthough. A swuad gunner too. Im not sure what type of SAWs are local to south africa though. Maybe give one a Stryker.

Good thinking. I'll think they'll be used in the story when they are send in as back up to Greg's team and the two soldiers. The marksman will be named Tic-Tac and he'll carry a L1A1 SLR fitted with a high powered scope. Another one will be named Johnson. He'll be the squad gunner and he'll carry a FN Minimi Paratrooper version fitted with a 200-round ammo drum. The second in command is Milo and he carries Norinco Type 56 fitted with a AKM style muzzle break and Remington 870 fitted with synthetic furniture, a heat shield, and a high capicity magazine tube. The last mercinary is named Joesph and he carries a AKM fitted with two magazines taped together "Jungle Style".

[k9870]

Got any sample writing?

[Swordfish941]

I do have the scene where Greg meets Nolan (I haven't written it down yet but I have it in my head). Here it is:

Greg walked into the hangar and sat down on a crate. His head was swimming and he felt like vomiting. It was probaly from the ride on the helicopter. He never been in one before. Infact, the only time he had ever taken air transportation was when he had travel from Liverpool to Joburg when he was four.

"First timer?"

"What?"

"First time ever riding in one of those things?" said a man of Greg's height and age. He had brown hair (kept in a crew cut) and a stuble beard. He had a Molle vest on with a pair of grey cargo pants and brown boots. He sat down next to Greg and took a sip from a canteen. "Here, this will clear your head." the man said handing it to Greg.

"What's in this?"

"Just some ice water, nothing fancy. Name's Nolan, what's yours?"

"Greg. Greg Archer."

"Nice to meet you Mr. Archer."

Greg finished off the canteen and handed it back to him. He looked down and notice that Nolan was carrying a rifle. It looked like a R5, but it had a handguard made of wood. Plus it had some sort of compensator on the muzzle.

"Nice piece of work you got there."

"Oh this? This took me a while to built. It's a 5.56mm Kalashniklov, Chinese made. I've see you have an American made rifle."

"Yeah. I preffer foriegn rifles."

"I reckon that you're no soldier, so you're probaly a mercinary."

"Indeed I am. I got a message from the commander of this base. Offered me a nice sum if I fight off the Renamo rebels near him."

[Alcatrazz]

A couple misspellings, and your characters seem flat. Otherwise, seems realistic.

[Swordfish941]

Originally Posted by Alcatrazz

A couple misspellings, and your characters seem flat. Otherwise, seems realistic.

What do you mean by flat?

[Alcatrazz]

Originally Posted by Swordfish941

What do you mean by flat?

They sort of seem artificial, more like information dispensers than actual living, breathing humans.