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PersonOfInterest 08-26-2010 08:45 PM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941 (Post 17847)
And then a mute serial killer, and later an Oxford student. What do you think of Mila Kunis?

Honestly, a cardboard cut out could have played that role in Sin City. And Mila Kunis? Having seen 10+ years of her as Jackie and Meg, I couldn't take her seriously in Max Payne. Haven't seen The Book Of Eli yet, but if she can go for a third role, then maybe she can be the next go-to-girl for the femme fatale roles. Until then...shut up Meg (Peter Griffin laugh).

Swordfish941 08-26-2010 09:40 PM

I find it extremely ironic that Mila voices Meg.

PersonOfInterest 08-26-2010 09:51 PM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941 (Post 17854)
I find it extremely ironic that Mila voices Meg.

Is it ironic that Seth Green is not fat? Or that Seth MacFarlane is not a dog?

Swordfish941 08-26-2010 10:57 PM

Back on topic, what do you think of Tom Hardy?

PersonOfInterest 08-26-2010 11:29 PM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941 (Post 17859)
Back on topic, what do you think of Tom Hardy?

No feelings one way or another.

Swordfish941 08-27-2010 11:06 PM

I have an idea that Greg and Katie have sex while listening to Iggy Pop & The Stooges' I Wanna Be Your Dog. It's not rough sex, but just intense sex.

Swordfish941 08-28-2010 05:10 AM

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Originally Posted by Markost (Post 14895)
:O

I was going to suggest Paraguay or Perú.

Are those two countries in some sort of war?

Swordfish941 08-29-2010 03:37 AM

I think Greg should know some form of martial arts. I'm thinking of bartitsu. Anyone have any suggestions?

Swordfish941 08-29-2010 05:09 PM

Here's another part of my draft:

"Mornin', babe." Greg said quietly,lightly kissing her on the lips. "What are you doing up so early? You need your sleep."

"For what?"

"Your looks, what else? I know you rarely wear makeup."

"I get my looks from my mother." she said leaning against him and stroking his chin. Greg looked down at her legs. She was wearing a pair of boy shorts. Tucked inside them was a .32 caliber pistol. He snatched it from her in a blink of an eye.

"Greg!"

"What this for? Ear piercing?"

Katie grabbed the pistol back from him. "It's my gun for port calls. This is a .32 Walther PPK."

"Where do you keep it?"

"Usually in my waistband. I'm planning on buying a holster from Sharlto."

"Who's Sharlto?"

"An old friend from high school. He's now an arms dealer."

"Really."

"He smokes two bags of grass a day. He's pretty much what you get when you cross a loose cannon and an eccentric blabbermouth."

"What a character." Greg said tossing his cigarette butt into the ocean. He stepped into the doorway and turned back at Katie. "Do me a favor: next time you go see him, bring me along. You want some coffee?"

"Sure."

Swordfish941 08-29-2010 11:30 PM

This is my concept of what Greg is supposed to look like:

http://www.morphthing.com/showimage/...ien-Brody.jpeg

Swordfish941 08-29-2010 11:43 PM

This is my second concept of Greg:

http://www.morphthing.com/showimage/...-DiCaprio.jpeg

Swordfish941 08-29-2010 11:51 PM

And this is my concept of Katie:

http://www.morphthing.com/showimage/...ila-Kunis.jpeg

Swordfish941 08-30-2010 08:27 PM

What do you guys think of draft and concepts?

Swordfish941 08-31-2010 12:40 AM

Greg walked down the hall and turned into the third door on the right. He was now in the kitchen. It wasn't exactly a kitchen, but it was close to one. A round table was in the middle with a few chairs at it. A miniature refrigerator was in the back along with a propane oven and a a TV tray with a coffee maker and a can of grounded up coffee beans. Greg walked over and took the cup out of the top part of it. He put a filter and two scoops of coffee into it, placed it back in, and pressed the "start" button.

Greg sat down in a chair with his feet on the table. The mission they had been paid to do was impossible. He and his team were paid for an assassination. His specialty was sabotage and reconnaissance, not assassination. The man they were hired to kill and let his whole world come crumbling down was a Hutu warlord named Sasha Solom. He had his own private army with highly trained men armed to the teeth with some of the best weaponry on the continent, including the 7.62mm Kalashnikov assault rifle.

Spartan198 08-31-2010 06:21 AM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941 (Post 18244)
What do you guys think of draft and concepts?

Looking good so far.

Swordfish941 08-31-2010 11:33 PM

He grabbed his shoulder and felt the bandage wrapped around it. The wound was from the Hutu, who had shot him with a 9mm handgun, and he had retorted by shooting him twice in the stomach and once in the head. Katie was able to get the bullet out, clean the wound, and sew it up. She had given him a shot of morphine and a Vicodin tablet to ease the pain, but he could still feel the burning sensation throbbing in his back. He just hope the money was worth it. The contractor had offered 250,000 Rand, half now, half later. The money was split into a ninth share, so the mercenaries and the boat's crew would each get a share. Greg knew what he was going to do with his share. As soon as he got to port, he was going to the nearest bar and buy three shots of Flor de Cana Black Label and a daiquiri heavy in grenadine. Besides Castle Lager beer and Smirnoff vodka, rum was the only kind of booze he would drink. He preffered mai tai's, mojito's, pina coladas. He hated drinking beer. Beer was too common. Everyone drank beer.

Swordfish941 09-01-2010 09:41 PM

Here's some information about Greg:

* Around 5"7.

* Dark brown hair.

* Hazel Eyes

* Unshaven face

* Born on November 5, 1991 in Cape Town, South Africa to Jonah Archer and Natalie Moore Archer.

* Was a Lieutenant in the South African Army.

* Is a five year veteran of the South African Special Forces Brigade.

* Chain smokes Marlboro Red Lights.

* Prefers rum cocktails (usually daiquiri's).

* Is experienced in Bartitsu.

* Specializes in Sabotage and Reconnaissance.

* Has suffered from Insomnia and Migraines in the past.

S&Wshooter 09-01-2010 10:19 PM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941 (Post 18367)
Here's some information about Greg:

* Around 5"7.

* Dark brown hair.

* Hazel Eyes

* Unshaven face

* Born on November 5, 1991 in Cape Town, South Africa to Jonah Archer and Natalie Moore Archer.

* Was a Lieutenant in the South African Army.

* Is a five year veteran of the South African Special Forces Brigade.

* Chain smokes Marlboro Red Lights.

* Prefers rum cocktails (usually daiquiri's).

* Is experienced in Bartitsu.

* Specializes in Sabotage and Reconnaissance.

* Has suffered from Insomnia and Migraines in the past.

Short little bastard, isn't he. You better drop the migraine thing though- if someone has a migraine, they ain't doing shit, much less do mercenary stuff

k9870 09-02-2010 12:23 AM

They dont make red lights, its one or the other

Swordfish941 09-02-2010 01:33 AM

Weapons in the mercenary's armory:

* Heckler & Koch G3A3 (South African version)

* AKMS (fitted with RAS handguard, vertical foregrip, and AK-74 style muzzle break).

* Steyr SGG 69 (fitted with double set triggers, sound suppressor, Harris bipod, and five round box magazine)

* Remington 870 (fitted with high capacity magazine tube, Surefire 618 weaponlight, heat shield, and spare shell holder).

* M203 Grenade launcher (standalone model; fitted with M4 style butt stock, vertical foregrip, and c-more red dot sight).

* Heckler & Koch SL8 (fitted with G36C style carry handle, suppressor, Harris bipod, and scope).

* IMI Uzi

* A box of RGD-5 hand grenades.

* A box of plastique and detonators.

Any suggestions for armory weapons?

Mandolin1 09-02-2010 01:35 AM

Red is regular, light is light.
Lights (or Golds now in the USA) have a row of little tiny holes to let smoke out and make it milder...or something. I just sell the things. Ultra Light (silvers) have more little holes.

S&Wshooter 09-02-2010 01:36 AM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941 (Post 18374)
Weapons in the mercenary's armory:

* Heckler & Koch G3A3 (South African version)

* AKMS (fitted with RAS handguard, vertical foregrip, and AK-74 style muzzle break).

* Steyr SGG 69 (fitted with double set triggers, sound suppressor, Harris bipod, and five round box magazine)

* Remington 870 (fitted with high capacity magazine tube, Surefire 618 weaponlight, heat shield, and spare shell holder).

* M203 Grenade launcher (standalone model; fitted with M4 style butt stock, vertical foregrip, and c-more red dot sight).

* Heckler & Koch SL8 (fitted with G36C style carry handle, suppressor, Harris bipod, and scope).

* IMI Uzi

* A box of RGD-5 hand grenades.

* A box of plastique and detonators.

Any suggestions for armory weapons?

FAL, Dragunov

Mandolin1 09-02-2010 02:40 AM

RPG-7

M72 LAW (more compact, and you can just hand them out all around)

M10/M11 (compact, lots of dakka)

Why a standalone M203? Add an M4 and stick the M203 on it.

He can have had migraines, i used to but haven't had any in forever.

Throw in a Benelli M4 Super 90 or Saiga 12

KS-23 (why not? it's kind of cool)

White phosphorous grenades and/or thermite

The AKMS, did you get the idea from The Kingdom for the stuff on them (that was a cool movie).

Swordfish941 09-03-2010 02:49 AM

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Originally Posted by Mandolin1 (Post 18383)

The AKMS, did you get the idea from The Kingdom for the stuff on them (that was a cool movie).

I did get that from The Kingdom. Anyway, do you guys think Elijah Wood and Mila Kunis would make a good on screen couple as Greg and Katie?

BurtReynoldsMoustache 09-03-2010 02:57 AM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941 (Post 18438)
I did get that from The Kingdom. Anyway, do you guys think Elijah Wood and Mila Kunis would make a good on screen couple as Greg and Katie?

He's way too short.

Swordfish941 09-03-2010 03:12 AM

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Originally Posted by BurtReynoldsMoustache (Post 18440)
He's way too short.

Wood is 5'6" and Kunis is 5'3". They fit like a glove.

Zulu Two Six 09-03-2010 11:27 AM

you are REALLY fucking creepy with this mila kunis stalkerish knowledge

BurtReynoldsMoustache 09-03-2010 03:08 PM

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Originally Posted by Zulu Two Six (Post 18451)
you are REALLY fucking creepy with this mila kunis stalkerish knowledge

Or he just looked it up on IMDB.

Swordfish941 09-03-2010 03:18 PM

BurtReynoldsMustache is right. I did look it up on IMDB.

S&Wshooter 09-03-2010 07:11 PM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941 (Post 18465)
BurtReynoldsMustache is right. I did look it up on IMDB.

Sure you did. It is good to know that I am 3 inches away from being a whole foot taller than Elijah Wood

Swordfish941 09-03-2010 07:19 PM

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Originally Posted by Zulu Two Six (Post 18451)
you are REALLY fucking creepy with this mila kunis stalkerish knowledge

I'm not a stalker. I get my sources from interviews.

Swordfish941 09-10-2010 01:29 PM

I want my book to have a futuristic feel to it. Not like a Jetsons style feel to it, but I want to have advance technology like iris identification and video phones. Any suggestions to make it a believable future?

BurtReynoldsMoustache 09-10-2010 02:11 PM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941 (Post 18913)
I want my book to have a futuristic feel to it. Not like a Jetsons style feel to it, but I want to have advance technology like iris identification and video phones. Any suggestions to make it a believable future?

Advertising fuckin' EVERYWHERE.

S&Wshooter 09-10-2010 06:13 PM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941 (Post 18913)
I want my book to have a futuristic feel to it. Not like a Jetsons style feel to it, but I want to have advance technology like iris identification and video phones. Any suggestions to make it a believable future?

President Teddy Roosevelt replicant #1934726

k9870 09-11-2010 01:29 AM

Virtual Reality conferences instead of teleconfrences.

Swordfish941 09-11-2010 01:30 AM

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Originally Posted by k9870 (Post 18941)
Virtual Reality conferences instead of teleconfrences.

Can you please explain?

BurtReynoldsMoustache 09-11-2010 01:59 AM

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Originally Posted by Swordfish941 (Post 18942)
Can you please explain?

You go into virtual reality to meet with people instead of just looking at a camera and a screen. I guess to help fully immerse you in the group dynamics of the meeting or whatever bullshit excuse corporate overlords of the future will come up with to force their employees into ridiculous situations.

k9870 09-11-2010 02:16 AM

Yes, basically give the face-to-face feel when its impractical to actually meet (like long distance.)

And another idea is that the mercs are on a deniable op so they cant bring around uber tactical super guns. That may explain using today's technology

BurtReynoldsMoustache 09-11-2010 04:55 AM

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Originally Posted by k9870 (Post 18945)
Yes, basically give the face-to-face feel when its impractical to actually meet (like long distance.)

And another idea is that the mercs are on a deniable op so they cant bring around uber tactical super guns. That may explain using today's technology

That makes no sense. Would people on a deniable op today use weapons from 50 years ago?

k9870 09-11-2010 12:59 PM

I wouldnt call a g36 or barrett 82 OLD, im just trying to explain why there not decked out like ghost recon.


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